Re: Ascension – A Community Project / And now a competition

Alright here’s JR’s script for the panels in case you guys wanna do line drawings. Of course you may color as well if you want. It’d be appreciated if the text code is provided along with the entry. Cheers and good luck!

Ascension: Issue 1
Full Page: Computer screen, on an email page. The email reads as such:
From: LCPL Rick Henare [mailto:richard.henare@defence.govt.nz]
Sent: Wednesday, 27 February 2008 6:29 p.m.
To: Walter Henare
Subject: Hey Dad
Hey. How’s mum? I got the care package, thanks. Pineapple Lumps melted though, which is stink, because it’s negative 1 out. I mean, come on! Not your fault of course. Okay, So I have news, I’m leaving Bamyan. No, I’m not coming home, but I’ve been offered a promotion of sorts. One of those corporate contractor types, Stephens was his name, has gotten in touch to say he’s headhunted me. Nothing specific, just that I stood out. He’s offered me a role, just as an Ensign for now, in what he called the Ascension Project. Our CO doesn’t know much about it (is maybe a little skeptical, but I mean, it’s hard loosing team members) but believes it’s a weapons development project, UN sanctioned apparently. It could be a leg up. The pay is better, the opportunities. He said I could make Corporal in a year. No idea about deployment, but I may finally get off the field. A change of scene could do me good.
Anyway, hope you guys are well, say hey to Brent and Lexi for me.
Cheers,
Rick
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Panel 1: Terrance Anders and Shada out having lunch on the Expo Promenade, by the Harbor. Long Shot, so we can see the cityscape background.
Narration: The present day. Hong Kong.
Panel 2: Zoom in so their table is the full focus of the shot. Shada is talking, making hand gestures that suggest she is moaning about something. Terrance is smoking a cigarette.
Panel 3: We switch to a new scene, this time we are in a dark, bare prison cell. On the bed in the corner we can see Shu Ji asleep, curled in the fetal position, sweating and rocking, obviously in discomfort.
Panel 4: We zoom around so we can see his face. His face is contorting as if he is having a nightmare.
Panel 5: Again we change scene, so we are now on the streets of downtown Hong Kong. We focus on Kate Quinn, who is walking down the street, looking in the shop windows.
Panel 6: We change position to across the street as we watch Kate enter a coffee shop. The sign outside the coffee shop looks like the Starbucks logo, but it isn’t.
Panel 7: We are now in a hospital ward, watching Gina Lamprey smashing up an expensive looking radiotherapy machine.
Panel 8: She now goes over to one of the cupboards and grabs a load of pill bottles.
Panel 9: Now we are in a normal office building. In a meeting room, at the end of a long board table. Adrian Wright and some other business people are walking in through the door.
Panel 10: Adrian puts some papers on the table. Someone else puts a glass of water down on the table.
Panel 11: We switch back to Kate Quinn in the coffee shop, she is ordering coffee.
Panel 12: Whilst her back is turned, the barista pours the contents of a little vial into her coffee.
Panel 13: Back with Adrian, who goes over and stands by the window, his face pensive. He itches his elbow absent mindedly.
Panel 14: We focus on the glass of water. It begins to tremble.
Panel 15: We focus on Adrian again. His expression has become one of shock and fear as the tremors begin to get worse.
Panel 16: We switch to Shu, (the same shot as panel 4), whose eyes snap open. The sounds of explosions fill the air.
Panel 17: Back to Kate, who has spilt some of her coffee on her shirt and has obviously swallowed a lot more of it than she had originally intended. The tremors are getting worse.
Panel 13: We switch to Terrance and Shada who have looked up from their meal. The table they are at is shaking. Both are looking up at the sky.
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Panel 14: We look up from a extremely low angle behind Terrance and Shada to see what they are looking at. Huge triangles have appeared in the sky. From bellow details are very hard to make out. In the background, there are many explosions and orange lasers being fired
Title: Ascension Part 1
Panel 15: Terrance and Shada run as one of the triangle ships causes a large wave to come sweeping onto the promenade.
Panel 16: They arrive on a street, however their way is blocked by a battalion of cyborgs.
Panel 17: They turn and run the other way, but Terrance trips over the body of a dead police man.
Panel 18: Shada stops to help Terrance.
Terrance: Don’t stop. Keep running. Run!
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Panel 19: Shada is shot with numerous orange beams, coming from different directions, as Terrance looks on helplessly from the floor and the cyborgs, who have fired the shots, advance from behind her. Shada’s body is in the process of falling to the floor, her arm outstretched ready to help Terrance up.
New/ Full Page: Computer screen, on an email page. The email reads as such:
From: Walter Henare [mailto:henarewalt@yahoo.com]
Sent: Thursday, 28 February 2008 5:49 a.m.
To: Rick Henare
Subject: Re: Hey Dad

Son, are you sure about this one? I mean, it sounds like some kind of cheesy action movie plot line. And think about your career! My dad, myself, your siblings, we’ve all served the NZDF for all our lives. What country is this even for? A little bit of clarity would be nice, you can’t just accept it without reading the fine print! I brought you up a little smarter than that boy.
Look, I know how excited you get about these things, but there is a bit to consider here. As your mum would like me to point out, you’re 28 next month, finish your tenure in Afghanistan and push the envelope upstairs, you wanted to get into intelligence, all your life you’ve talked about it, what changed? Money?
Look, I don’t wanna come down on you. I’m just concerned.
We all love you very much.
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Panel 20: Our scene switches back to Shu Ji’s dark cell. We can hear loud banging and crashing from out side the cell, along with screams. Shu is covering his ears, obviously in pain from the sound.
Panel 21: The wall of Shu’s cell bursts inwards, sending debris shooting across the cell. Shu raises his arms to protect his face.
Panel 22: We close up on Shu’s forearms as the debris cut into them.
Panel 23: However, the cuts heal almost instantaneously, still leaving blood covering his arms, but no visible wounds.
Panel 24: Shu runs out of his cell, bodies covering the floor and other prisoners running for their lives. The corridor is as dark as the cell. The only light comes from the flames that are starting to engulf the place.
Panel 25: Shu pushes past a number of people and starts to rush up the stairs. The air is thick with smoke.
Panel 26: Shu runs rurther up the stairs. The sound of gun fire is getting louder.
Panel 27: Shu runs head long into someone and is knocked to the floor.
Panel 28: We take the P.O.V of the person Shu ran into, towering over Shu, the shadow covering most of him as he crouches on the floor, a look of fear and loathing plastered across his face, desperately trying to get to his feet.
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Panel 29: Towering over Shu, grinning menacingly (and slightly psychotically) is a cyborg, his gun aimed squarely at Shu.
Panel 30: Shu launches forward…..
Panel 31: ….disarming the cyborg in one swift movement.
Panel 32: Shu somersaults over the cyborg, firing the cyborgs own weapon until it falls to the ground, dead.
Panel 33: At that moment huge robotic walkers appear out of the smoke and flames, their guns tearing into Shu.
Panel 34: We watch the silhouettes cast by the flames as Shu drops to the floor.
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From: LCPL Rick Henare [mailto:richard.henare@defence.govt.nz]
Sent: Friday, 29 February 2008 11:24 a.m.
To: Walter Henare
Subject: Re: Re: Hey Dad
I know, I know, but this role seems to be more R&D.
Look, there was another raid on the Yankie camp last night, it’s just chaos here, no matter how much we rebuild, every relationship we repair, it just comes crumbling down. Our role here helps big time, I’m not doubting that. But I’m convinced the Ascension is going to help even more.
I’ve gotten more details, nothing I can talk about, which is exciting in itself. All I know is I’m moving to a facility somewhere near Minsk which I had to look up myself anyway. So not warmer climates, but we’ll see what comes of it. I’m really excited about this dad, I’d like for you guys to be too.
So I have another two weeks here before I have to say goodbye. I’m going to miss my squad, but they are all a little envious. Of what, well, we aren’t quite sure.
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Panel 35: Kate Quinn is wiping her spilt coffee off of her t-shirt and lower jaw. The barista who served her is rushing to the door from behind the counter.
Kate: What was that? An earthquake?
Panel 36: The barista is at the door now, looking up and down the street. From out the window we can see buildings are damaged and people are injured. The barista looks worried.
Barista: No.
Panel 37: The barista turns to face Kate, his expression deathly serious.
Barista: They are here.
Panel 38: The barista rushes towards Kate as another tremor strikes. From out of the window we see the triangle ships appearing in the sky, raining orange beams down on the city. We can also see the blurry shapes of an army of cyborgs advancing down the street, heading for the shop.
Kate: Who is……
Panel 39: The barista grabs Kate and rushes her towards the back exit of the shop. The sound of gunfire now fills the air.
Barista: Come on, we have to get out of here.
Panel 40: The two burst through the back door into a small corridor at the back of the shop. There is screaming from inside the café and the sound of glass breaking. The cyborgs have obviously entered the shop. From of screen, in the corridor, a grating metallic voice speaks.
Cyborg: Wong Li An
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Panel 41: The corridor is full of cyborgs. One, obviously the leader, steps forward. The barista (Li) pushes Kate behind him, to protect her from the cyborgs. Kate is obviously shaking and looks like she is going to be sick. The cyborg leader speaks again.
Cyborg: Wong Li An. You are in possession of MT-VS7. You are a threat to the Ascension and you must be eliminated.
Panel 42: From over Li’s shoulder we can see the cyborgs bursting through the door from the shop. Shards of wood scatter across the corridor.
Panel 43: The cyborgs in front of Li raise their guns, and eerie orange glow fills the corridor.
Panel 44: We close up on Kate’s face as we hear the sound of the guns being fired. She screams.
New/ Full Page: Computer screen, on an email page. The email reads as such:
From: Rick [mailto: rickishere1138@gmail.com]
Sent: Saturday, 6 December 2008 04:03 a.m.
To: Walter Henare
Subject: Updates
Hey guys, how are you all? Give my love to the family. I’m at an undisclosed location doing some exciting work. I’ve spent a bit of time with the R&D department. Not sure how much I can tell you but we are doing some really interesting stuff with prosthesis and sensory augmentations, real cutting edge stuff which I think could actually make armed warfare a thing of the past. In saying that, I’ve volunteered to test them out on a field mission in the New Year. I’m pretty excited! Really revolutionary, I feel like I’m at the edge of this amazing new precipice. I’ve made friends with a scientist named Wolgast who is really ambitious and see’s so much potential for this in the medical world. Prosthetics are one thing, but some of the areas we are working on could really change the world. I mean, how do you get lung cancer if we just build you a new lung? Phenomenal.
I think I can talk about our Commander and Chief Reischek, who’s a big deal in the media as far as I’m aware. What a guy, his vision for Ascension is inspiring. I really feel like my work here is making a difference. I’m a soldier first and foremost, and I’m craving getting back out there and doing what I’m best at, but right now, Reischek and this entity I work for are making the real difference.
Not everything is so great now. So we are a multi-cultural bunch, but of course, typical aussies. My CO here is a man named Townsend, real meat head. And with the wrong ideals. I guess part of you was right in assuming the whole soldier-of-fortune merc thing. It’s uncommon, but there is always that one jerk-off that’s too trigger happy, that lives for the blood. One egg can’t spoil the whole dozen.
Anyway, I’d better run, as you know communication has been sporadic, but if I can’t skype you before it, have an incredible Christmas! I hear Penny is coming up for it? Have a great time!
All the best,
Rick.
Narration: Ascension African Research Division, Korhogo, Côte d’Ivoire, December, 2008
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Panel 45: The window Adrian is standing by explodes and Adrian is thrown to the ground.
Panel 46: Adrian shields his face from the falling glass.
Panel 47: Adrian picks himself up off of the ground slowly, looking around to see what has happened to his colleagues. They are all on the floor, having been knocked off their feet too, some starting to groggily get back to their feet. The whole room is being bathed in a strange orange glow.
Panel 48: Adrian looks around to see what is outside the window. His expression becomes one of utter shock at what he sees.
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Panel 49: Adrian stands in front of the ruined window, his back to us. The other side of the window is one of the triangle ships, completely blocking out anything else from being seen, it’s search lights lighting up the office.
Adrian: $@*%
Panel 50: Adrian turns to his colleagues, most of whom are now on their feet, and shouts to them, whilst also racing for the door.
Adrian: Takagi, Whitmore, everyone get up. We need to get out of here before it goes completely to $@*%.
Panel 51: Outside the office, the corridor is in chaos. Everyone on this floor is attempting to get out, there is a massive gaggle of people crowding around both the elevator and the stairs. Adrian and his colleagues push their way through the crowd and reach the stairs.
Panel 52: We see people streaming down the stairs, Adrian amongst them. (This may be a good opportunity to do a B.E.V shot down the center of the stairwell).
Panel 53: The people stream out from the stairs into the lobby, which is a wreck, most of the furniture is smashed and/or charred and a carpet of glass covers the floor.
Panel 54: Standing in the center of the lobby is a lone cyborg, tall and menacing. His massive machine (laser) gun is trained on the office workers panicking around him, grinning evilly, an orange glow illuminating his face in a way that makes him look even more terrifying.
Panel 55: The cyborg opens fire. Screams fill the air and people fall to the floor, some dead, some trying to avoid the lasers.
Panel 56: Adrian launches himself through the window and out into the street.
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Panel 57: This is a good opportunity to show the wide spread destruction being caused. With Adrian in the foreground, we can see buildings half destroyed and burning, bodies laying charred on the floor, cyborgs gunning down the panicking population without mercy and the triangle ships hovering in the sky like the storm clouds of oblivion.
Panel 58: Adrian turns and runs, a strange pruple glow starting to engulf his body (faintly at first).
Panel 59: We look at Adrian face on as he runs. His face is contorted in fear and anguish, he looks as though he wishes he was somewhere else. The purple glow is growing stronger and it is now very bold.
Panel 60: Suddenly Adrian disappears and the place he was standing is completely empty, as if he wasn’t there at all.
Panel 61: Our scene changes to a decently furnished apartment, far away from the invasion, although we can still see its effects out of the window.
Panel 62: Adrian suddenly appears out of thin air in the apartment. He looks like he is going to be sick and his nose has started bleeding.
Panel 63: Adrian faints and falls to the floor.
Panel 64: We look over Adrian’s unconscious body at the destruction in the city center.
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From: Walter Henare [mailto:henarewalt@yahoo.com]
Sent: Thursday, 2 July 2009 0:12 a.m.
To: Rick Henare
Subject: Son
It’s been three months, for gods sake. We are worried. We haven’t had a call, an email, nothing. I don’t know how to contact you, DF gave no forwarding, you’ve given us nothing. You’ve said nothing since you were deployed to Somalia in April. Look, get in touch, your mother is very sick, and part of me places the blame on you. I’ve always maintained, family first, even before career, you know that.
Just let me know you’re okay.
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Narration: Message 11 of 15 sent to Henare through numerous channels. July – September, 2009
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Panel 65: Standing over Terrance is a nasty looking cyborg. He has a thick beard and a greasy ponytail along with his horrible scars and black armor. He had a nasty grin plastered across his face.
Panel 66: We switch to look at Terrance, whose face no longer shows any fear, just hatred, his clothes covered in blood, the body of Shada laying, smoldering, in front of him.
Panel 67: Terrance raises his right arm, his hand outstretched, as if trying to strangle the cyborg. Blood drips from his shirt sleeve.
Panel 68: The cyborg is lifted into the air, the grin disappearing from his lips. He clutches at his neck. Dents start of appear in his armor.
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Panel 69: The cyborg is crushed by his own armor, blood bursting out of it and bits of mechanics flying everywhere.
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Panel 70: The previous panel appears on a screen, alongside images of Shu Ji being attacked by the walkers, Kate Quinn and the barista surrounded by cyborgs and Adrian teleporting away from the destroyed street.
Panel 71: A hand reaches out and switches off the screen.
Panel 72: Mr. Reaper turns away from the screen. He smiles menacingly.
Mr. Reaper: Well, this has started to get interesting.
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From: ASC E.11506 [mailto:11506.ACSF5.8@ASCINT.MU]
Sent: Friday, 7 October 2011 9:10 p.m.
To: Walter Henare
Subject: I’m Sorry
Dad, Mum, I hope you guys are okay. I’m sorry, ever since we arrived here we have had to go dark, I’m on an opp I can’t talk about, but some heavy shit has gone down. I don’t know. I’m worried you might have been right. This isn’t what I thought it would be. I hope you guys are okay, just know that I’m alright. I’m going to be fine. I love you both so much, give my love to Brent and Lexi, I hope they are doing well too. I’ll try to keep in touch. This channel is limited, if you reply within 36 hours it will still be viable.
I love you
Narration: 5th Fleet Battalion, Ascension Legionnaire African Research Division, Mogadishu, Somalia, October, 2011
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Panel 73: We watch as Gina climbs out of a wrecked subway carriage, unhurt. She is still carrying the suitcase.
Narration: Issue 1; Epilogue
Panel 74: She walks a little away from the carriage….
Panel 75: ….before stopping and putting down the suitcase.
Panel 76: She pulls out a diary and hastily scribbles an entry into it.
Panel 77: Putting away the diary she pulls out some of the pills she stole from the hospital and takes some.
Panel 78: She has a swig of water from a bottle and pulls out some crackers and a torch.
Panel 79: Taking a bite out of one of the crackers, she switches the torch on with her free hand and shines it down the tunnel.
Panel 80- 84: We now move further away from Gina down the tunnel, with each panel she grows further away and seems to grow much more tiny and lonely as we do so until we can’t even see her or her torch.
Narration (Panel 85): To Be Continued.
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From: Walter Henare [mailto:henarewalt@yahoo.com]
Sent: Sunday, 9 October 2011 7:52 p.m.
To: ASC E.11506
Subject: Re: I’m Sorry
Your mother died two months ago.
Don’t come home.